Here my 100CW
The earth was dark and stormy unlike ever before; and thick smoke covered the the surface. It was so chilly as the smoke cleared. One day, the world froze. Many of the people, even animals was so weak, cold and miserable. Few day later, scientists found out why the world is frozen. It was because the sun was covered, and moon was making lots of snow! The next day, the snow was gone but it was warm and raining. Suddenly, the sun was uncovered, and the world is warm and nice and will never change again! What a beautiful world!
i liked your your story but watch out for your past, present and future tense
ReplyDeleteExcellent use of semi-colon Jorja.
ReplyDeleteAs has already been mentioned, just be careful of your tenses.
When you said 'is' it should be 'was' and where you have said 'was' it should be 'were'.
Keep up the great work!
What an amazing piece of writing. You have taken me as a reader into the lunar and solar world. I am so glad there was a happy ending. I agree that we live in a beautiful world.
ReplyDeleteI look forward to your next blog post.